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1.
It has
occurred to me that one of the most important subjects that we study in school
is mathematics. Although it is true that it is important to know how to read,
if we do not know how to do simple arithmetic when we do some everyday kind of
activity like go to the grocery store,we will not be able to keep track of our
finances. It is necessary for us understand things such as interest rates on
bank accounts and loans for houses or cars in order to keep track of our
personal account without going bankrupt. Many people are poor not because they
do not earn enough money, but because they don’t understand the mathematics
behind finances.
Beside the importance that mathematics has in our
finance lives, it is also important in many other parts of our lives. There is
the need that we have to measure and calculate numbers when we cook, for
example. In the kitchen, we have to know about mathematical functions like
fractions or multiplication. Sometimes we cut amounts in half because viewer
people are being cooked for or we have to double or triple amounts if a lot of
people are coming over to visit us for a special occasion. Not being able to figure
out the sums for cooking a cake could have final result of a terrible tasting
disaster.
Paragraphs Concise :
One of the most important school subjects is
mathematics. Although learning to read is important, if we do not know how to
do simple sums, we will not be able to keep track of our finances. Besides
everyday calculations such as figuring the best prices per weight in the
grocery store/ we need to understand more complex computation to understand
interest rates on our bank accounts and loans for major purchases. People who
earn enough sometimes have financial difficulties because they do not
understand the mathematics behind finances.
Mathematics is also important in other parts
of our lives. For example, we have to measure and calculate numbers when we
cook. We need to know about mathematical functions like fractions or
multiplication when we decrease or increase the amounts depending on the number
of people who are going to be eating. An error in sums could result in a
bad-tasting meal.
2.
The electric streetcar was popular among the people in cities in the United
States after 1880. when an engineer invented a cable that could run a wire
overhead to a streetcars electric engine. Because there was this overhead wire,
it wasn’t necessary to have a dangerous electric rail running along the street
at ground level, and this was a very important feature of the streetcars in
those cities that used them.
During the next 20 or 30 years or
so, for 1880 onwards, the electric streetcars was very popular with passengers
in big cities all over the USA. It was not polluting, and it is was very
efficient, carrying large numbers of passengers without costing very much money
for the passengers. It was also profitable for the companies. However, early in
the next century, automobile manufacturers and other business interest made an
effort to get rid of all the streetcars. Eventually the situation was that all
the streetcars disappeared, and cars completely took over all the city street.
Paragraphs Concise :
The electric streetcar was popular in U.S. cities after1880 when an
engineer invented a cable that could run from wire overhead to a streetcar's
electric engine. Because of this overhead wire, a dangerous electric rail did
not run along the street at ground level. This was a very important feature of
the street car.
From 1880 onward, the
electric streetcar was very popular in big cities all over the U'S'A' Non
polluting and very efficient, it carried large numbers of passengers cheaply
and at profit for the companies. However, early in the next century automobile
manufacturers and other business interests attempted to replace streetcars with
buses and cars. Eventually, cars completely took over the city streets.
